Trait Example - Conventions


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Through the sky of hyperspace

Through the view ports of the Star Destroyer Relentless, the molted sky of hyperspace drifted silently by as Captain Teirrier stared coldly at his bridge crew before him. Not so long ago in the distant past he would have felt forgiveness or at least pity for the crew of his starship. But not now, not after the destruction of Mount Taintis and every last one of the Grand Admiral Thrawn's Sparti cloning cylinders. What was not left of the Empire was hardly enough to even take control of a single planet. Their main shipyards were destroyed and they were running out of military personnel to man their remaining ships. The Relentless itself was one of the few, but precious Star Destroyers in functional condition. Functional...As he thought it he almost laughed at his foolish choice of words. Only four of the original ten turbo blasters were operational now, and the starboard deflector shields were running at critically low energy. To top it off, the hyperdrive was constantly malfunctioning and the techs working on it apparently had no explanation. All in all the Star Destroyer Relentless was in tough shape.

But none of that mattered now that he was in charge. Captain Teirrier had plans for his precious empire. Big plans.


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A lesson on the court

When I was younger about 5 or 6 I remember my first grade P.E teacher telling the class "It's not about who wins or loses, it's how you play the game" A good philosophy when teaching little kids how to play fair. But after a couple of years of playing basketball on the blacktop and football in the field, the philosophy becomes a little reworded "How you play the game decides who wins or loses: and most kids always want to be on the winning side. The play ground produces two types of personalitys participants and non-participants. the non-participant speaks for itself, the type of kid who doesn't care about sports. The participant the type of kid who plays everything, not because he or she is good but cause it is fun.


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Character change in Macbeth

In the play Macbeth, There are many charecters,and they all change during the story. The two charecters I will talk about are Macbeth, A thane of glamis who overnight,turned into the king of Scottland. And on a lesser note,Lady Macbether,A woman who drove Macbeth to do evil deeds for her own personal bennefit..

In the begining Macbeth and King duncan respected each other,And after showing great talent on the batlefield,duncan called Macbeth a"valient Kingssman!,Noble gentleman.


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Afternoon

On Tuesday, December 22, I went about my business going to my classes as usual. After school my friend came and picked me up to go to his house. After we got to his house we grabbed his fishing stuff and started to go to my house. It was on the way to my house, coming down the street, that we saw a hinder binder. After we got to my house we packed up my fishing stuff and we were on our way to the afterbay of the Bighorn River.

It was about 8:00 when we got there. We started fishing. We had a kind of cycle where one casts out and lets it float away before the other. Then when you retrieve it, you go behind the other person.


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